tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1300095395388562446.post5505221415072721065..comments2023-05-11T09:48:33.992-04:00Comments on Christine's Cottage: The rest of the first sceneUnknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1300095395388562446.post-45341974928310672992009-06-18T18:18:21.941-04:002009-06-18T18:18:21.941-04:00Hey, Mitch and Pam, Thanks a bunch! I'm glad ...Hey, Mitch and Pam, Thanks a bunch! I'm glad you liked it.<br /> <br />The rest of the book is not nearly this good, unfortunately. I've gone over and over this first scene, but haven't done a whole lot with the rest of the manuscript.Nighfalahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01745824744507928211noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1300095395388562446.post-8430624823134698402009-06-18T17:50:54.626-04:002009-06-18T17:50:54.626-04:00Great continuation of your first page! Great actio...Great continuation of your first page! Great action, plenty of danger, and the whole idea of a creature called a nightstalker is just too cool to put into words. Is that an actual mythical creature, or did you create them?<br /><br />Couple of pieces of honest criticism: I know it's very early in the story, but I had a hard time differentiating between all the characters in this scene, so Mitchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02900796131446856656noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1300095395388562446.post-86789944514993758432009-06-18T14:25:09.316-04:002009-06-18T14:25:09.316-04:00Very exciting! It's smooth and clear with gre...Very exciting! It's smooth and clear with great action and emotion. I like the feeling of fear at the end regarding the lions hunting in teams. Good job!Pam Halterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13980301862494655691noreply@blogger.com