Hey Christine, I liked the 3rd version the best b/c it put me in the action faster. As Ray said, your writing's strong, but I think a bit more action in the 1st two would help bring the reader in faster.
Did you see my comment on FTQ? The problem that I have is that when I do jump right into the action, my test readers go into conniptions. "What? Who? Where? I'm so confused! This is moving too fast."I'm also a little concerned that the readers would expect non-stop action, and the book isn't like that. But, I do know where you're coming from. I just don't know how to please everyone, or who is right.I have to laugh, because Version 2 is partially based on a suggestion of Ray's to introduce the main character as he gets the message to go out to the farm. I think he forgot!
Hi, Christine! Well, I did it! I flogged your quill, which (I must admit) sounds vaguely naughty. I'm just sayin'.Anyhoo, while I voted for Version 1, I'd actually like to see a combination of the three... I'm one of those old-timey folks who like to see character/setting description more than action in the first page. But I'm apparently a rare breed these days, as my own novel indicates. :-(
I'm the same breed, Laura. But trying to adapt. Survival of the fittest and all that.I think it also depends on the audience... whether I'm writing primarily for men or women. Or teens.I haven't made up my mind yet.By the way, I don't know if you visit FTQ that often, but the critics are usually pretty tough. I'm floored that I have only a 10% "no turn" rate, and that the comments have been so positive. I've been feeling so discouraged lately. This is very heartening.Now if I could only find the time and mental focus to actually do some writing.
I'm with you, girl. Maintaining and visiting blogs has been murder on my writing/editing schedule! Must... turn... off... Internet.P.S. Congrats again on the good news at FTQ. That was actually my first visit to the site - but I can imagine that the critics are often brutal.
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